Excellent! Chapters 9, 11 and 14 are spot PL OK.
Notes for chapter 15:
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22.00-22.11
And so it was that by dying to Stephen, Sir Philip would live on in the attribute of mercy that had come that day to his child.
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I think this is one of those words that tends to make English so hard to learn as a foreign language, because the stress is different when it’s a noun versus when it’s a verb...
22.55-22.57
...she felt his si-[des swell with a vast, resigned sigh; heard the creaking of damp girth leather as he sighed because he had understood her. For the love of the chase was still hot in Raftery, the love of splendid, unforeseen danger, the love of crisp mornings and frost-bound evenings, and of long, dusky roads that always led home. He was wise with the age-old wisdom of the beasts, it is] true, but that wisdom...
A bit of the paragraph seems to have been clipped in the editing, I’m guessing (?).
It's really moving along. You're already a quarter of the way there! I hope things are going well, you've had your second jab and everything with Fiverr is better than you'd hoped.